Lost is a very hard TV Show to summarise because of its complexity, and there are many different storylines intertwined. But basically its about strangers that are on a plane, crash somewhere in the pacific ocean and end up on this weird island. A lot of the characters died, but there are about 6 main ones left. Half of them eventually get off the island, but are then told by a higher power (not God, someone else) that they must return to the island.
WARNING: MAY CONTAIN SPOILERS
'The Return of the Losties'
Lauren Williams
Sawyer just stood there, staring at her. She was so beautiful, more beautiful than he could ever remember, and she stood there with those eyes, those eyes he had once stared longingly into before staring back at him…she was back.
Kate slowly started to walk towards Sawyer, not knowing what she was going to say or do, not knowing how to feel or how others would feel…how Jack would feel if she…no she couldn’t go there, she wouldn’t go there again.. she was just there to help them, all of them, get off the island for good.
Kate slowly started to walk towards Sawyer, not knowing what she was going to say or do, not knowing how to feel or how others would feel…how Jack would feel if she…no she couldn’t go there, she wouldn’t go there again.. she was just there to help them, all of them, get off the island for good.
She stood before him looking into his eyes, she felt his hand stroke hers… she couldn’t hold back, she wrapped her arms around him, feeling him breathe against her…she never wanted to let go.Jack turned to look away, he couldn’t bare to see Kate in the arms of another man, especially this one...again.
They pulled away from each other, still no words coming from either of them.
Hurley and Jack approached Sawyer, shook his hand. “Good to see you again Sawyer” Jack said, “Jack” replied Sawyer nodding his head, “It’s been a while”.
Hurley looked Sawyer up and down, “So Dude, Why ARE you wearing a Dharma suit?”, they all stared at Sawyer, waiting for an answer. “Uh, let’s just say we’ve had to make some changes- adapt to the situation” said Sawyer, “Let me take you to our home”.
Sawyer and Jack jumped in the jeep, Kate, Hurley and Jin following in the VW behind them. They were silent, both of them had so many questions to ask each other, but neither of them knew where to start. Jack spoke first, noticing Sawyer’s name badge on his Dharma suit, “La Fleur?”…Sawyer didn’t say anything, they sat in silence for a few minutes. “Listen Jack, since you’ve been gone a few things have changed around here, that’s all I’m gonna say right now- but we’re gonna have to come up with a story for you, otherwise the gang’s gonna start asking questions”.
“What gang Sawyer? What have you got everyone into here?”
They arrived at the camp. Jack, Kate and Hurley didn’t move.
“What do we have here then?” Horace said as he walked up to the jeep.
Jack looked at Horace, he looked like some sort of down and out drunk he thought to himself… but he couldn’t really say that about someone else now could he considering what he USED to be. He wondered, could this be their leader, the leader of the Dharma Initiative… Even after all this time he still didn’t know a lot about them.Horace took Sawyer aside “What’s going on La Fleur? Who are these people?”, Sawyer hadn’t had time to think, his mind had been racing; seeing Kate, and the others again, what the hell was he going to tell Horace?.
“I had a thing for a girl once and I had a shot at her, but I didn't take it. After a little while I'd lay in bed every night wondering, was it a mistake? Wondering. I never stop thinking about her. But now I can barely remember what she looks like. And her face is, she's just gone”
Sawyer thought back on his conversation with Horace, only hours earlier. What had he been thinking? Her face wasn’t gone, he had never stopped thinking about her, and now she was here, staring at him through the window of the car, relying on him to help them. Explaining everything to Horace wasn’t the only problem he had to deal with, there was Juliet too. Juliet, the one he had come to love over the past 3 years, the one who he had tried to replace Kate with. What was he going to tell her? Now that Kate was back. How could he possibly choose between the two of them?
Kate and Hurley had joined Jack in the Jeep, the three of them intensely watching the conversation between Sawyer and Horace. Hurley started to panic, “What if they find out who we are dude? What if they think we’re here to hurt them? What if they try to KILL us dude?!”
Jack tried to calm him down, the last thing they needed was Hurley panicking in a situation like this, Jack was worried enough himself, he had no idea what was going on- What sort of role was Sawyer/La Fleur playing here?
They sat there in silence.
A few minutes past and Horace approached the Jeep.....
Well i must say im not a very big lost fan, havent even seen one episode :P, but i like the direction this in going in. At first I thought it might be a love story but it seems like its quickly heading towards some action.
ReplyDeleteI can find anything that you need to edit, it all seems quite fine and i like the way you decribe the scene's in detail but still simple.
I kind or like it :D
Thanks, I know what you mean about it seeming like a love story. I don't really want it to be, but it seems it naturally went that way.
ReplyDeleteI would like a lot more action in it. Currently trying to think where and how I could include this.
Thanks for the feedback though.
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ReplyDeleteI'm the same; I’ve never seen or got into Lost. The story does seem like it's heading towards a love story but is drawn away when they hop into the Jeep and head off.
ReplyDeleteThe story is well written and draws in the reader by adding certain twists and characters to it. The pictures help identify who the characters are as I had no idea who they are. The scenes are well set out and descriptive which is effective in a story like this otherwise the reader would be lost and put off.
I don't get the whole "Lost" series but the story is detailed and can be read by someone who has never seen the show and sort of pick up on what is happening without going into, too much detail .
Well, I for one am a sucker for Romance, so I thought it was really good. Great character development, and really set the mood between the characters realtionships. I've also never watched Lost before, so I have no idea what the real storyline is. The descriptions were really nicely done too, great job!
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ReplyDeleteI've watched lost a few times and I think you described the characters well in terms to how they come across one screen. Though Sawyer is never really as romantically inclined outwardly but who knows what goes on in that characters head lol. You wrote it well without any grammar mistakes that I noticed and I story is easy to follow and seems to flow well. Like the other guys said to seem to be heading towards some kind of heated confrontation it would be cool for you to continue with it to describe what reaction the Dharma Initiative have to the return of the oceanic six. Great fan fic!
Thanks a lot for all the feedback guys. The style I have tried to write my fan fiction in is like the show. The TV Show jumps from character to character pretty quickly. So although I have described what the characters are feeling and what situation there in, I never spend too much time on one person.
ReplyDeleteI have now written a final copy under a new post. I have added to it, and changed a few things.
Hope you guys like it.
Thanks again :)